peer review2

Evaluation for 20304 - 20304 김규민(Kim kyu min) http://20304kimkyumin.blogspot.com

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3점, 중간에 파트부분이 빠진곳이있음.
How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
리서치가 교육적인 부분이 없음.

Thesis
What is the thesis?
 E-sport should be regarded a real sport.
Is the thesis clear and debatable?
네.

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
찬성에서 썼을 것.

Any other thoughts?
아니요.

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
중간에 narration이 증발해버린것같다.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
게임을 좋아하는 많은 청소년의 마음을 끌 수 있을 것 같음.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
네

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
네

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
잘 말했습니다.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
네

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
narration에서 확실하게 말해줬으면.

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
네

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
네.

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
안바뀌었어요.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
E-SPORT에 대한 자세한 예시들.

Research
Is the author using research effectively?
네

Is the research from appropriate sources?
네

Are the sources obvious?
네.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
네.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
네.